Comment on the best bits: It's a good bit of continuous action. Your actors do well.

Things you can improve: Well - loads: you need to have followed the brief I gave you as well as your storyboard - without that, you lose marks all over the place. And most of the edit was done for you. Perhaps because you have been away it doesn't help, but Jess has spent time out when you were in and that hasn't helped either.

Marks are out of 3 for this:

0 means you haven't done it.

1 is lowest - it means that there is a lot that needs to be done, but that you have the material to sort it out and make it work.

2 means that you've done the job competently and it is OK.

3 means that you've done some parts of it really very well, and should work to exploit this.

CAMERA

Medium Shot MS 2

Long Shot LS 2

Close Up CU 1

XLS - extreme long shot 1

XCU - extreme close up 0

Pan 2

Tilt 2

Zoom 3

Cross focus 0

Deep focus 0

Tracking shot (dolly, hand held, shoulder shot) 1

Point of View - POV 1

Use of tripod 3

EDIT

Shot - reverse shot 1

Establishing shot 2

Cut 1

Dissolve 0

Total out of 54 = 22 = 40% = E (only just, one mark less is a U)

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